Kid ,get a shotgun and blow your brains out.
Red vs. Blue wanna be.
1. Your voice is crap
2. Dont stick the microphone in your mouth.
3. Hmm bad quality vid , laggy
4. Whats with the hell and foul language?
5. Bad Cam positions.
Next time use a voice masking application to make the voice of the grunts funny.
Work and learn the script , dont read it.
This should go to garbage bin.